Hello Hazel Class, 


I'm just reading your writing from this afternoon and had to share Daniel's work, it is amazing!


We used a video of Bernard the bear sky diving to inspire some descriptive writing and this is what Daniel came up with...
My heart was panting as fast as a cheetah could run and I could barely breath.  The plane was flying through the clouds that were cotton wool when the air whispered across my face in the blue sapphire sky.  Then I jumped...


I shot down like a lightning bolt in the crisp fantastic sky.  i did a supersonic star cartwheel and a 360 turn while gliding past several birds with razor sharp beaks that I only just missed. I never felt more alive!  Now I was relaxing, chilling out just waiting for it to get extreme again.  The air was soft and calm but it was going to get crazy again. The ground was in sight, it was going to hurt, I was afraid. 


The ground was coming closer and closer, I was panting and looking worried then there came a loud bang and crash. I was dizzy and could barely stand. 
kelsey
5/10/2013 15:24:07

nice work Daniel.

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sophia
5/11/2013 11:22:56

brilliant discription Daniel

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robbie
5/17/2013 08:02:22

wow!just wow!

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kielan
5/17/2013 08:13:07

wow that hand writing just sounds very neet i wish i could see it.

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Izabella
5/17/2013 08:39:54

Wow nothing else to say just WOW!

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Daniel's Mum
5/17/2013 09:34:31

What a fantastic description! Well done Daniel

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daniel's dad
5/17/2013 14:14:08

Brilliant description

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khate
5/18/2013 15:24:02

Daniel that was amazing!

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Olivia
5/25/2013 14:43:43

I read through it and I absalootly coded realy loud because it was fffaaabbb:-):-):-):-)I mean it good work Daniel!!!!

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Georgies mum
10/2/2013 08:34:21

very impressed lovely work Daniel

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khate and kelli y5
10/10/2013 04:01:05

good work daniel we miss y4 :(

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