What a piece of writing!

Hello Hazel Class, 


I'm just reading your writing from this afternoon and had to share Daniel's work, it is amazing!


We used a video of Bernard the bear sky diving to inspire some descriptive writing and this is what Daniel came up with...

My heart was panting as fast as a cheetah could run and I could barely breath.  The plane was flying through the clouds that were cotton wool when the air whispered across my face in the blue sapphire sky.  Then I jumped...


I shot down like a lightning bolt in the crisp fantastic sky.  i did a supersonic star cartwheel and a 360 turn while gliding past several birds with razor sharp beaks that I only just missed. I never felt more alive!  Now I was relaxing, chilling out just waiting for it to get extreme again.  The air was soft and calm but it was going to get crazy again. The ground was in sight, it was going to hurt, I was afraid. 


The ground was coming closer and closer, I was panting and looking worried then there came a loud bang and crash. I was dizzy and could barely stand.